Thursday, July 25, 2013

I've Looked at Clouds



Ronald Lumley settled back in his seat, gave a sigh of contentment, and gazed through the round portal.

"There's nothing more beautiful!" thought Ron.  High above everything else, the delicious white fluffy shapes billowed magnificently like mountains, sumptuously as a fleece yet softly and gently like puffs of smoke.

"Oh, miss?" he said to the uniformed woman walking down the aisle beside him.  "When will we arrive at our destination?" 

"Almost any second for you, sir," the woman replied and continued down the aisle through the hallway to the office of Dr. Kropotkin.

"So sad, Doctor! Addicted to painkillers.  Every time he opens a new bottle, the same delusion!"

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I've looked at this story from both sides now and am on Cloud 9 that at 108 words it did not billow too far beyond the 100 word goal for me this week at the Friday Fictioneers.

If you want to twist open the cap, pull out the cotton, and grab a handful of the offerings of the other Fictioneers, click here and I promise they'll  have you soaring too!  

Either in the sky or otherwise, your preference.

32 comments:

highfiveandraspberries said...

Haha great story..now I've got Judy Collins stuck in my head...

shreyank2012 said...

haha... hilarious :)

mezzojan said...

Great story...but why doesn't medicine ever have those pleasant side effects for me? I must be doing it wrong.

Sandra Crook said...

I think I need a bottle of what he's on. Nice one.

Lewis Cave said...

I'm with Sandra,I need what he has it sounds like a fun ride!

Leslie said...

that's a lot of cotton balls there Perry
great story

bridgesareforburning said...

Hi Perry,
This is such a clever piece of writing with so much misdirection ingeniously thrown in. Once I realized how thoroughly I had been tricked, I went back over it word by word, savoring each deceptive detail. I think you have a future as a snake oil salesman, or maybe as a politician. This is really a good one. Ron

Russell said...

Dear Perry,
Do you have an address or phone number for Dr. Kropotkin? I'd like to make an appointment as soon as possible.

lingeringvisions said...

Good chit!

pattisjarrett said...

Too funny! Love the twist at the end. And I don't mean the cap!

Rochelle Wisoff-Fields said...

Dear Perry,

I think this is one of your best. You're forgiven 8 extra words. If you hadn't fessed up to it no one would ever have known. Nice one.

Shalom,

Rochelle

zookyworld said...

If you're going to have delusions, this sounds like a very nice to have!

Perry Block said...

Well, that's lots better than ABBA!

Perry Block said...

But this was a deeply serious story about drug addiction!

Perry Block said...

Here, I'll show you ...

Perry Block said...

Problem is, even my characters won't share with me!

Perry Block said...

Yeah, but I'd rather take the plane ride to Hawaii. Unless he thinks he's going to Detroit!

Perry Block said...

Thanks, Leslie. Do you save them too?

Perry Block said...

Well, I certainly dig internet pornography enough to be a politician! Thanks, Ron.

Perry Block said...

Yes, but which Dr. Kropotkin? For some reason I use that name for every doctor I ever refer to in this blog. Do you want the Professor of Faux Anthropology? I've got the psychiatrist all tied up.

Perry Block said...

Thanks. Hate to be a dumb Baby Boomer, but ... what's a chit?

Perry Block said...

I like that line! Even though I need a stand-in to get the bottles open.

Perry Block said...

I am nothing if not honest. Actually I'm not usually that either! Thanks, Rochelle.

Perry Block said...

Yeah, but it kind of depends where the plane is going. Someplace in Antarctica, maybe not so much.

troy P. said...

For the record, there's nothing really too terribly wrong with ABBA... =)

Shirley said...

Life's illusions. Very good take on this prompt. Is Judy Collins still around?

Perry Block said...

Yes, she's alive but somewhat faded, sad to say. Sounds like she's had a difficult life. Miss the days when she and a few others were truly transcendent.

Perry Block said...

Sorry, that doesn't compute. ERROR MESSAGE! ERROR MESSAGE!

That's okay, we can still be friends, we just won't ever discuss them.

thewritersvillage said...

Cute story of addiction if an addiction story could be ever be cute

Perry Block said...

I don't know if the story is cute, but I am! Sort of. Kind of. Formerly.

thebumblefiles said...

Perry, I love your description of the clouds. A place I'd like to go to...too bad it isn't real!

Perry Block said...

Thanks. Too bad it isn't more popular!