"I know you're really gonna love this place, Perry," said John as he held the door open for me.
"I like it already!" I replied. "Hip clientele, cool atmosphere, and great painting over the bar! How'd you find it?"
"Just kind of stumbled into it. See, they got beers from all over the world too."
"Why, this place is nothing less than iconic! Good burgers?"
"The best! Oh, here comes that blonde waitress, met her last week. Hi, Janine!"
"What are you doing here again, low-life? And who's the overage bald-headed loser you brought with you today?"
"Of course," John whispered in my ear, "one thing they do need to work on is service with a smile."
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Despite the service sans smile, the iconic bar has proven to be a very cool place for this week's Fabulous Friday Fictioneers to hang out. There's not just beers, but writers from 'round the world on tap, and you can order up some by clicking here.
My story based on the picture prompt above was ordered for just 100 words, but came in overcooked at 117. Hope it's still well done and, more or less, to your liking.
But even if not, I dare ya to ask Janine to take it back!
34 comments:
The charm of the woman! Thanks for making me smile over breakfast. :)
Breakfast? It's 2:00 AM!
charming. hahaha makes me wonder what John did on his last visit. lol
Nice. A little abuse with your drink. Then you can drink to abuse.
And then it's time for some anti-buse.
OMG..it's Flo!
I first read 'overage' as average. It works with both words - I like your take on the prompt.
Perry, I would never describe you as an overage (or average), bald-headed loser!! And I'll even tell Janine that if I see her. Really. I will.
janet
This is real customer service. lol
Nothing like a little sass with your glass--Happy trails, Perry.
Well, three out of four really isn't that bad. I'd overlook the bad service if the bathrooms are clean. :D
Thanks, kz. John is probably a glutton for punishment or the blonde waitress is a hell of a lot better looking than the picture prompt would suggest.
"Drink to abuse." Perfect. Should be the title of the post!
Flo is Scarlett Johansson by comparison. With a carload or two more makeup.
I guess "average bald-headed loser" is better than "overage bald-headed loser" if you had to choose between the two of them...
Well then what type of bald-headed loser would you describe me as?
What I didn't say is that she brings the food fast, makes sure you have everything you need, and refuses tips. But she does spit on you as you go out ...
Sass with your Glass. Great name for the place! Thanks.
The bathrooms are spotless. Janine has put up a sign "all employees are required to wash hands before leaving the bathroom and the patrons are required to wash them!"
Dear Perry,
Where's Undercover boss when you need him. I don't think Janine would last long. Fun story.
shalom,
Rochelle
So the place isn't perfect, but hey it's good enough for the guy to come back. Maybe he likes giving sass back to the waitress?
Hahahahaha! Always a bright spot, isn't there? Oh well, I hope the food was good.
Always a pleasure, Perry!
Maybe I am the uncover boss! Thanks, Rochelle.
Don't forget - best burger in town!
Thanks, glad you enjoyed. I'm still trying to get Janine's teeth marks off me ...
There is always something that needs "a bit of work".
Scott
Mine: http://kindredspirit23.wordpress.com/2013/05/09/friday-fictioneers-5102013-genre-horror-humor-pg13/
Yep, Scott, there is. Like my entire existence.
How cool! The bar and Fabulous Friday Fictioneers. Sounds like the perfect combo. Will head over to see what it's all about.
Yep, it's fun. And people leave comments. And they like you, they really like you!
I wonder hoe much longer the place will stay open with staff like that. Great take on the prompt.
With patsies like me and John, probably well into the next millenium! Thanks for writing.
I'm sure you and John impressed her by flipping out your AARP membership cards and demanding the senior discount. I would have just turned off my hearing aid and said, "Huh?"
Made me laugh.. (RogRites)
Yes, except I also hit her with my cane and John gummed her with his false teeth. It'll be a cold day in Hell when I go feeding pigeons with the likes of her!
Thanks,Rog. You rule!
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