FF- Flash Fiction
Ronald Lumley settled back in his seat, gave a sigh of contentment, and gazed through the round portal.
"Nothing more beautiful!" thought Ron. High above everything else, the delicious white fluffy shapes billowed magnificently like mountains, sumptuously as a fleece yet softly and gently like puffs of smoke.
"Oh, miss?" he said to the uniformed woman walking down the aisle. "When will we arrive?"
"Almost any second, sir," she replied and continued down the aisle to the office of Dr. Kropotkin.
"So sad, Doctor! Every time he opens a new bottle and gazes at the cotton, the same delusion!"
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I've looked at this story from both sides now and am on Cloud 9 that at 108 words it did not billow too far beyond the 100 word goal for me this week at the Friday Fictioneers.
If you want to twist open the cap, pull out the cotton, and grab a handful of the offerings of the other Fictioneers, click here and I promise they'll have you soaring too!
Either in the sky or otherwise, your preference.
Haha great story..now I've got Judy Collins stuck in my head...
ReplyDeleteWell, that's lots better than ABBA!
DeleteFor the record, there's nothing really too terribly wrong with ABBA... =)
DeleteSorry, that doesn't compute. ERROR MESSAGE! ERROR MESSAGE!
DeleteThat's okay, we can still be friends, we just won't ever discuss them.
haha... hilarious :)
ReplyDeleteBut this was a deeply serious story about drug addiction!
DeleteGreat story...but why doesn't medicine ever have those pleasant side effects for me? I must be doing it wrong.
ReplyDeleteHere, I'll show you ...
DeleteI think I need a bottle of what he's on. Nice one.
ReplyDeleteProblem is, even my characters won't share with me!
DeleteI'm with Sandra,I need what he has it sounds like a fun ride!
ReplyDeleteYeah, but I'd rather take the plane ride to Hawaii. Unless he thinks he's going to Detroit!
Deletethat's a lot of cotton balls there Perry
ReplyDeletegreat story
Thanks, Leslie. Do you save them too?
DeleteHi Perry,
ReplyDeleteThis is such a clever piece of writing with so much misdirection ingeniously thrown in. Once I realized how thoroughly I had been tricked, I went back over it word by word, savoring each deceptive detail. I think you have a future as a snake oil salesman, or maybe as a politician. This is really a good one. Ron
Well, I certainly dig internet pornography enough to be a politician! Thanks, Ron.
DeleteDear Perry,
ReplyDeleteDo you have an address or phone number for Dr. Kropotkin? I'd like to make an appointment as soon as possible.
Yes, but which Dr. Kropotkin? For some reason I use that name for every doctor I ever refer to in this blog. Do you want the Professor of Faux Anthropology? I've got the psychiatrist all tied up.
DeleteGood chit!
ReplyDeleteThanks. Hate to be a dumb Baby Boomer, but ... what's a chit?
DeleteToo funny! Love the twist at the end. And I don't mean the cap!
ReplyDeleteI like that line! Even though I need a stand-in to get the bottles open.
DeleteDear Perry,
ReplyDeleteI think this is one of your best. You're forgiven 8 extra words. If you hadn't fessed up to it no one would ever have known. Nice one.
Shalom,
Rochelle
I am nothing if not honest. Actually I'm not usually that either! Thanks, Rochelle.
DeleteIf you're going to have delusions, this sounds like a very nice to have!
ReplyDeleteYeah, but it kind of depends where the plane is going. Someplace in Antarctica, maybe not so much.
DeleteLife's illusions. Very good take on this prompt. Is Judy Collins still around?
ReplyDeleteYes, she's alive but somewhat faded, sad to say. Sounds like she's had a difficult life. Miss the days when she and a few others were truly transcendent.
DeleteCute story of addiction if an addiction story could be ever be cute
ReplyDeleteI don't know if the story is cute, but I am! Sort of. Kind of. Formerly.
DeletePerry, I love your description of the clouds. A place I'd like to go to...too bad it isn't real!
ReplyDeleteThanks. Too bad it isn't more popular!
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